APPLICATION LETTER:
Blk 111, Wonder Ave 1
#03-456
Singapore 111111
8th February 2011
Ms Tina Ong
Human Resource Division
PSA Corporation Limited
460 Alexandra Road
37th Storey PSA Building
Singapore 119963
Dear Ms Ong,
I am writing to apply for the position of operations executive that was promoted at the career fair that was held in National University of Singapore (NUS) during 27th and 28th January 2011. I find the process of planning and directing container-handling operations interesting and would like to take on the role. I strongly believe that being analytical and decisive would help me to excel in this field and be a great addition to your team.
I am a third year undergraduate at NUS pursuing a bachelor’s degree in Life Science. I will be graduating after this semester in June 2011. I understand that performing shift duties will be part of the job and I have the willingness to do so.
My past experiences in leadership roles, have taught me to manage and lead teams of people. As a marketing head in NUS Science RAG committee, I had the opportunity to lead four members in my department and also be a team player in a committee of 21. I believe these past experiences have equipped me with strong leadership skills. Furthermore, my past working experiences in sales and promotion, have given me ample of opportunity to interact with clients and customers. As such, I have developed strong communication and interpersonal skills, which are vital for the role of operations executive in one of the world’s busiest ports
On top of these, my background in Taekwondo martial arts, have cultivated in me a strong sense of discipline in all things that I do. In addition, my awards and achievements in various competition and events that I take part in is prove that I am results-oriented. I believe that I am a suitable candidate for the position.
I would greatly appreciate the opportunity to discuss more extensively on how I can contribute to your firm in an interview. I will be available at any time convenient to you and can be contacted at 91231239. I look forward to hearing from you.
Yours faithfully,
Jeremy Lee
Encl: Résumé
Hi Jeremy,
ReplyDeleteI feel that you have expressed your achievements well and have linked them to the requirements stated.
About the second paragraph that states your education qualification, it seem a little strange to end of with the willingness to work shift duties. It might be more suitable to place it in another paragraph. I realized that nothing of education is being said, it would not be inappropriate to include a line or two in the qualification paragraph.
A minor thing that you might have overlook, since the person’s name is known, ‘Yours sincerely’ should be used.
Regards,
Peh Joo
Hey Jeremy,
ReplyDeletei agree with PehJoo about putting education and willingness to work in shift does not really fit well together.
Another point is that one of the requirement require strong communicating skills. Correct me if I am wrong, the container operator are mostly experience people. Maybe you can add in if you are able to speak dialect and it might help to make your application letter stand out?
Apart from the 2 above, your letter look great to me.
See you. =)
To Peh Joo,
ReplyDeleteThanks for pointing out the mistakes to me. I am aware of how the willingness to work shifts seems to be out of place. do u have any suggestions how I can fit it in?
Jeremy
To Tommy,
ReplyDeleteThanks for pointing out to me the part on working in shift. do you have any suggestion how i can fit it into the letter?
I think what you mentioned about adding in "being able to speak dialect" seems valid to me to make my letter stand out. However i am not very fluent in it. Thank you for the suggestion anyway!
Jeremy